The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
While
the given graph indicates the amount of income that a particular country could achieve by exporting specific
products
from 2015 to 2016, the below table illustrates the exact number of changes that happened in the exportation of five types of goods during
this
time frame.
Overall
, over
this
mentioned period of
time
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the value of four categories of these exports experienced a growing trend, namely
petroluem
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petroleum
products
, engineered goods, textiles and agricultural
products
,
while
the
amount
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of gems and jewellery exportation reduced.
To begin
, petroleum
products
had been exported more in 2016 compared with 2015, an increase of 3%.
Moreover
, the exportation of textiles and engineering goods had the most significant growth among these
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items respectively by 15.24% and 8.5%. The value of agricultural
products
exports was almost identical at approximately 30 billion.
Furthermore
, the value of gems and jewellery exports reduced by about 5% over
this
period of time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • value
  • percentage change
  • compare
  • trends
  • changes
  • chart
  • table
  • overview
  • introduce
  • highlight
  • describe
  • summarize
  • information
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