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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate
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information about
global
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the global
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expense
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expenses
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, using of resources by
contries
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countries
 and the allocation of the population. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, Asia had
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 a significant part of the
chart
, whilst the next major segment uncategorized appliances caught
one third
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 of the
chart
. Meanwhile,
consumption
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 of resources
due
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 to the countries. In terms of the most significant feature of the
chart
, Asia caught a place more half than
a
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 total size of the
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,
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 for 57%.
Moreover
, other parts of
region
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the region
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,
such
 as Europe and Amerika,
that
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 showed the same result with 14%.
On the other hand
, Africa ( 10%) and Other
population
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populations
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(5%) became less categorized segments. In regard to other kinds of spending, uncategorized devices held 40% which is
the
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bigger than other
categorises
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categories
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such
 as
,
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 food, transport and housing. Food is the second field which was required, and
it
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followed by transport(18%) and housing(12%). Clothing
hade
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had
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 been the least choice to spend money. Of particular note is that, from
countries
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the countries
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list
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, USA and
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Europe
Eurpoe
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Europe
 were the main resources of spending money,
therefore
it
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 hit
its
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60%
while
,
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unknown regions
were
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just stand out
40
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%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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