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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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These two pie charts illustrate the five causes of
people
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 who stayed in the
UK
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 or left the
UK
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 for other countries. In sum, the majority of reason for
people
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 to leave or stay in the
UK
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 was the same.
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, it is
also
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 noticeable that the second concern
for
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was for
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 those who were different.
People
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 were more likely to stay in the
UK
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 since join families and friends,
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 was the same reason for those who left the
UK
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, with a percentage of 39% and 34%, respectively.
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, 24% of the proportion of
people
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 choose to leave the
UK
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 since the weather, which was the second priority compared with other reasons. 28% of the proportion of
people
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 considered work setting which ranked second for the reasons that
people
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 staying in the
UK
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. Financial reasons and taxation were not really taken considered by
people
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 whether they staying or leaving in the
UK
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, which value was below 11%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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