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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provides information on how electricity was produced and consumed by ten leading nations in the year 2014.
Overall
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, China and the United States (US) contributed the most in generating and utilising electricity among all countries.
Furthermore
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,
while
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 all of them generated more electric current than their usage, Germany was the only nation that consumed more than they produced.
Firstly
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, China had the most electrical power among others at 5,398
billion
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kWh
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, which was just slightly over its consumption of 5,322
billion
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kWh
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. Thereby, resulting in a 76
billion
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kWh
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 difference between them.
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, the US were the second highest in producing electrical power.
However
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, in a comparison with China, the US utilised slightly less of its energy, with a difference of 233
billion
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kWh
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.
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, looking at other countries, almost all countries, except Germany, produced more energy than its utilisations. The excess of electric current ranges from 19 to 172.2
billion
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kWH
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, with Russia and India showing the smallest and largest gaps. Interestingly, Germany was the only one that used more than they manufactured, with a gap of minus -55.9
billion
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kWh
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