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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts compare the amount of bachelor’s and master’s graduate pupils who refused to apply for full-time
work
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 after graduation in England in 2008. It is noted that the category of
further
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 study is mostly
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graduates
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 who have chosen, both master's and bachelor one, for the reason that, to not willing to become full-time workers in the year 2008 in the United Kingdom (
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).
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, the reason for doing voluntary
work
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 is the least choice that they have chosen . Around 3 million
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 university
graduates
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 have planned to have
further
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 studies, and those who chose to
work
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 at part-time jobs and suffered from unemployment were reduced to half of the highest one, at approximately 1.8 and 1.6 million
students
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. Working for voluntary
work
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 is the least, only around 3500 pupils choose
this
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 reason. For the master
graduates
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, same as the
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 bachelor
graduates
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, the highest category (around 2800
students
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) is the young individuals who choose to
further
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 study. Following by the ones who chose to
work
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 for a part-time job, at probably 2500
students
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, only slightly less than around 200
students
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 compared to the ones in
further
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 study. Other choices which for unemployment and voluntary
work
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, are both below 2,000
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students
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 to choose for the reasons in explaining why they did not
work
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 for full-time.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, uk, graduates, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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