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The bar chart represents female unemployment rates in the England, Wales, Scotland, Northern Ireland.

The bar chart represents female unemployment rates in the England, Wales, Scotland, Northern Ireland.
The bar chart represents female
unemployment
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 rates in
the
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England
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,
Wales
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, Scotland,
Northern
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and Northern
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Ireland
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. The picture
discribes
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describes
 the percentage of female
uneemployment
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unemployment
 in the four
contries
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countries
 of
England
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 in 2013 and 2014.     As
a
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presented in the bar chart the highest indicator of
women
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women's
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unployment
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unemployment
employment
 for 2013 in
England
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. The largest number of female
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unemployment
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unemployed
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for
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in
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 2014 in Scotland.The least percentage for 2013 in
Wales
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 and for 2014 in
Nothern
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Northern
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Ireland
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.       The picture shows slightly more female
unemployment
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for
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 2013 than
for
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in
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 2014. There are significantly fewer
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unemployment
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unemployed
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 women
for
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in
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  2013 and
for
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2014 in
Wales
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 and
Nothern
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Northern
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Ireland
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.In
England
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 and Scotland many more
female
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females
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 unployment in comparison
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Wales
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to Wales
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 and
Notern
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North
Ireland
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.      In general,
the
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number of women
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women
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women's
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unemployment
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 almost in the four
contries
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countries
 are reduce by 2014.
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 could be noticed, that the numerous of female
unemployment
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 are slightly
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 by 0.6% in 2014.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, england, wales, ireland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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