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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line graph illustrates
average
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 carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per individual in four different countries of Europa from 1967 to 2007.
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, there was
slight
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 decline in the
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 of carbon dioxide
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 per human in the United Kingdom.
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 the
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 of carbon dioxide
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 only decreased in Italy and Portugal.
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reates
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rates
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 fluctuated in Sweden. There were over 10 metric
tonnes
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CO2
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emissions
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 in the UK in 1967.
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rate
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 declined slightly to about 9
tonnes
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 from 1967 to 2007. When it comes to CO2
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 in Italy and Portugal. There were 4
tonnes
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 of CO2
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 in Italy
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in 1967
. During the next decade,
this
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rate
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 increased noticeably to over 6 metric
tonnes
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. From 1977 to 1987,the
amount
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 of CO2
emissions
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 rose slightly to about 7 metric
tonnes
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. There was a slight increase in the
amount
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 of CO2
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 to just below 8 metric
tonnes
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 between 1987 and 1997. After
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10 years, there was no change in
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rate
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. When it comes to rates in Portugal. There
was
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 about 1 tonne
CO2
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of CO2
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emissions
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 in 1967. The
amount
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 of CO2
emissions
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 increased noticeably to just below 4 metric
tonnes
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 between 1967 and 1977. During the next decade,
this
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rate
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 rose slightly to approximately 5 metric
tonnes
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. From 1997 to 2007,there was a slight rise to over 5
tonnes
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.
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, there
was
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 about 9 metric
tonnes
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 of CO2 in Sweden in 1967. From 1967 to 1977,the
amount
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 of CO2
emissions
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 rose significantly to over 10 metric
tonnes
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.
However
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, after 10 years
this
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rate
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 declined significantly to approximately 7 metric
tonnes
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.There was a slight decline in the
amount
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 of CO2
emissions
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 to just below 6 metric
tonnes
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 between 1987 and 2007.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, amount, tonnes, co, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 7 times.
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