The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (COz) emissions per person 

in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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average
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carbon dioxide
emissions
per individual in four different countries of Europa from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, there was
slight
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a slight
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decline in the
amount
of carbon dioxide
emissions
per human in the United Kingdom.
Then
the
amount
of carbon dioxide
emissions
only decreased in Italy and Portugal.
While
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reates
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rates
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fluctuated in Sweden. There were over 10 metric
tonnes
CO2
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emissions
in the UK in 1967.
This
rate
declined slightly to about 9
tonnes
from 1967 to 2007. When it comes to CO2
emissions
in Italy and Portugal. There were 4
tonnes
of CO2
emissions
in Italy
in1967
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in 1967
. During the next decade,
this
rate
increased noticeably to over 6 metric
tonnes
. From 1977 to 1987,the
amount
of CO2
emissions
rose slightly to about 7 metric
tonnes
. There was a slight increase in the
amount
of CO2
emissions
to just below 8 metric
tonnes
between 1987 and 1997. After
from
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10 years, there was no change in
this
rate
. When it comes to rates in Portugal. There
was
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about 1 tonne
CO2
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emissions
in 1967. The
amount
of CO2
emissions
increased noticeably to just below 4 metric
tonnes
between 1967 and 1977. During the next decade,
this
rate
rose slightly to approximately 5 metric
tonnes
. From 1997 to 2007,there was a slight rise to over 5
tonnes
.
Finally
, there
was
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about 9 metric
tonnes
of CO2 in Sweden in 1967. From 1967 to 1977,the
amount
of CO2
emissions
rose significantly to over 10 metric
tonnes
.
However
, after 10 years
this
rate
declined significantly to approximately 7 metric
tonnes
.There was a slight decline in the
amount
of CO2
emissions
to just below 6 metric
tonnes
between 1987 and 2007.
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