The graph below shows the proportions of workers in three different sectors in South Korea between 1981 and 2011
The line graph illustrates the shifts in the percentages of employees distributed in three separate sectors in South Korea from 1981 to 2011.
Overall
, services
had precedence over the other two sectors in the employment rate. While
services
witnessed an upward trend in the proportion of workers, agriculture showed a downward trend. In addition
, the figure for the industry
fluctuated slightly throughout the period.
To begin
with, the employment rate for services
was the highest in 1981. After that, it went up steadily to about 45% in 1986. A similar pattern was seen in the industry
. However
, instead
of going down consistently like the industry
, the portion of services
continued to surge before peaking at approximately 70% at the end
of the period. Unlike services
and industry
, the percentage of employees in agriculture decreased significantly from 1981 to 1986. Then
, it progressively declined and finally
dropped sharply and hit a low of about 5% in 2011.Submitted by songvangproduce on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words services, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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