Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends. Do you agree and disagree.

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point of view, what enlistment should learn from school is their academic curriculum & passing exams because domestic sciences
such
as cooking, wood
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working
and
dress making
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can be taught
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their friends & family members. I completely disagree with the given idea and in
this
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I will support my opinion.
To begin
with, craftsmanship helps recruitment to develop their strategic and logical
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thinking
.
While
, enlistment
are
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doing things like sewing,
carpenting
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carpeting
& other
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practical works at That time they need to think
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of
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for doing their
work
successfully.
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,
this
help
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them to be
stragegic
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strategic
and logical thinker.
This
only be gained from practical application by doing something.
This
cannot get by reading a magazine or any theory books. What is more,
this
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the level of intelligence of
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admission. Recent
researcher
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found that
,
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there is a direct correlation between ey and hand
work
with
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brain activity.
For
this
reason, they do better in
other subject
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another subject
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too.
Furthermore
,
craftart
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craft art
helps to
eracdicate
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eradicate
gender stereotypes
form
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family
as well as
society. Nowadays, boys and girls both should know every kind of
work
.
As a result
,
this
will help them to be broad minded
also
will be needed for
future
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definitely.
For instance
, when anyone’s button is broken, they will know how to fix it because they had studied dress-making in the past.
Finally
,
this
classes
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teaches enlistments patience and perseverance. Because whe3n they are making anything worthwhile they have to do their
work
very slowly & steadily.
In contrast
, there are some people who are giving their opinion for learning
these
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work
from home & friends as it will kill
times
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from academic subjects. But, what they are not seeing is that
,
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the
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young parents
are
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lack
of
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this
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skills so how can
the
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they
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teach
this
to
another
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.
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Moreover
, It will be helpful to learn
this
from
an experts
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rather
that
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larning
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learning
from parents. To sum
, not
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only admission should learn these skills like cooking, sewing, and
carpenting
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carpeting
in school if they are able to, but
also
they should spend more time on the main subject to pass exams.
However
, they should balance between crucial and less important subjects.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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