Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends. Do you agree and disagree.

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point of view, what enlistment should learn from school is their academic curriculum & passing exams because domestic sciences

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their friends & family members. I completely disagree with the given idea and in

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I will support my opinion.

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with, craftsmanship helps recruitment to develop their strategic and logical

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thinking

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doing things like sewing,

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& other

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practical works at That time they need to think

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for doing their

work

successfully.

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them to be

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strategic

and logical thinker.

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only be gained from practical application by doing something.

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cannot get by reading a magazine or any theory books. What is more,

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the level of intelligence of

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found that

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there is a direct correlation between ey and hand

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brain activity.

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reason, they do better in

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another subject

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too.

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helps to

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eradicate

gender stereotypes

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family

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society. Nowadays, boys and girls both should know every kind of

work

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will help them to be broad minded

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definitely.

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, when anyone’s button is broken, they will know how to fix it because they had studied dress-making in the past.

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teaches enlistments patience and perseverance. Because whe3n they are making anything worthwhile they have to do their

work

very slowly & steadily.

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from home & friends as it will kill

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from academic subjects. But, what they are not seeing is that

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young parents

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skills so how can

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teach

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, It will be helpful to learn

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larning

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only admission should learn these skills like cooking, sewing, and

carpenting

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carpeting

in school if they are able to, but

also

they should spend more time on the main subject to pass exams.

However

, they should balance between crucial and less important subjects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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14Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
39Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams. Other skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends. Do you agree and disagree.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In several countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both ideas and give your opinion.