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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Manager,
Last
 night I had eaten in your restaurant and
condition
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the condition
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 is pretty good the
ambiance
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ambience
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 and the air condition
is
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are
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 all good and I order an agli o olio spaghetti and some garlic bread with extra garlic. But, I have
encounter
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encountered
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 some uncomfortable
condition
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conditions
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 and I wrote
this
 email to inform you.
Firstly
, When one of your staff, Celine bring the menu to my table, The food had already cold and when I asked to remake my order she just walked away and didn't give any attention. It's really
embrase
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embrace
embraced
 me.
Then
, I think that's okay, maybe I asked
to
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too
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 much and I tried my food but It's really not cooked at all.
Lastly
 the toilet, I think
this
 not
appropiate
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appropriate
 to talk about. The toilet was smelly and got no air
freshner
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freshener
fresheners
. I think you could install some air
freshner
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freshener
fresheners
. Eventually, I would like you to refund my money like the term of your restaurant and I would like you to maybe train your staff more so something like
this
 wouldn't happen in the future time.
Last
 month, when I ate here the food is really good and I love it. Are you got a new chef or something
?.
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 Maybe you could change your chef. Best Regards, Hung
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