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In today's world, traffic is becoming a major issue. What do think that the role of society and individual to solve this problem

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Nowadays, the amount of time taken to travel from one place to another is increasing
due to
 transportation problems. Everyone on the road is dealing with high travel jams and delays. In
this
 essay, I will demonstrate the responsibilities of each person and community to improve the situation. First of all, the drivers should obey the drive safety rules.
For instance
, most of the time
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travel is caused
due to
 carelessness of people leading to accidents.
This
 causes inconvenience to the other people on the lane through either route being closed or getting stuck in between the vehicles on the pathway stopped
due to
 the incident. In regard to solving
this
 issue, the government should construct roads with more lanes and emergency lanes
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both ways.
Also
, there should be more strict driving rules implemented with fines if someone is caught over-speeding and breaking regulations.
In addition
 to that, the roads should be maintained in a proper way with no pits to avoid accidents
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 on the roadway.
On the other hand
, there should be well managed public transport system for the convenience of the population. To elaborate on the idea, if individuals begin to use public transport there will be less amount of vehicles on the way resulting in less transportation. The executives should run more railways and buses.
This
 should be done more often and with a large number of routes for public benefit.
To conclude
, I agree with the individuals and community taking equal leadership in the task to maintain safety on the way and people travelling to the different destinations of the world.
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