IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie chart displays after graduating from the Anthropology degree course students after completing one university
as well as
Linking Words
 the table provides information on the salaries after five years of experience of Anthropology
graduates
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, more than half per cent of
graduates
Use synonyms
 did full-time
jobs
Use synonyms
whereas
Linking Words
 some students are doing part-time
work
Use synonyms
 and even some are unemployed.
However
Linking Words
, the Government sector is the highest salary reaching more than $100,000
while
Linking Words
 the least to reach
this
Linking Words
 salary are the Private companies and the second one are the freelance consultants.
Graduates
Use synonyms
 of Anthropology after completing the undergraduate degree chose various paths more than 50% of students are doing full-time
work
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 there are
graduates
Use synonyms
 between 10% to 15% who are either doing part-time
jobs
Use synonyms
 or are unemployed.
Moreover
Linking Words
, Below 10% of
graduates
Use synonyms
 are doing part-time
work
Use synonyms
 with their postgraduation studies or they chose to do full-time postgraduate study and
then
Linking Words
 there are
graduates
Use synonyms
 who don't know what they are doing.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, after 5 years of
work
Use synonyms
 in a specific field, there are different salaries. Those who did freelance consultant
jobs
Use synonyms
 could expect some rapid salary growth. Other than that government sector
jobs
Use synonyms
 salaries are quite linear
whereas
Linking Words
 the private companies pay scale is fluctuating.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, jobs, work with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: