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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals say that the only reason for learning a foreign
language
 is in
order
 to
travel
 to or
work
 in a foreign nation. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign
language
. In my opinion, the main reasons why
people
 learn
foreign
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language
 is for
travel
 or
work
. On the one hand, some think
people
 learn foreign
langauge
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language
 not only for
work
 or
travel
. They believe some learn a new
langange
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language
 in
order
 to enhance their mental health.
This
 is because scientists have
been
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proven that
learn
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forign
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foreign
language
 can
boosts
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 brain functions.
Therefore
,
people
 who
bilingual
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 are less vulnerable to
to
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get mental health issues, poor memory, depression, and anxiety.
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those
people
 who believe
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the
 main purpose
from
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 learning a new
langauge
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language
 is for
work
 or
travel
.
To begin
 with, in recent times
people
 who speak several
language
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 are more likely to get a better job
opportunity
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.
This
 is because
the
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most companies these days require
people
 who speak many
langauge
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languages
.
For example
, In Saudi
Arabia
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 companies prefer applicants who speak Arabic and English.
Therefore
, most Saudi
people
started
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 learn English in
order
 to improve their professional
career
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.
Furthermore
,
people
 learn a new
language
 in
order
 to
travel
 abroad.
For instance
, many
people
 worldwide learn English
langauge
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language
 in
order
 to
travel
 to the UK or U.S.A as tourists.
To sum up
,
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 my perspective, the major reasons why individuals learn a foreign
language
 is to
boosts
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 their future career
as well as
travel
 around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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