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in their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negetive development?

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Recently,
product
 owners have used advertising to introduce their own
products
 and say that these
products
 are new in some ways.
Although
 advertising can be used to say
this
 specific
product
 is new, maybe it is better to mention some different aspects of the production. On the one hand, the only way to introduce and broadcast a new
product
 from a company is through advertising. Imagine a company or business creating a new thing; is there any other way except advertising to introduce it? I believe it is natural for businesses to emphasize the newest aspect of the
product
 since it is a source of competition against other competitors.
On the other hand
, it is positive to mention that
this
product
 is new, but I think it would be better if they made some positive points in comparison to other similar
products
. People have
this
 habit if they want to buy something new: they go to the market and compare similar
products
 with each other, or they visit some website and read reviews. So, the negative aspect of
this
 action is that they do not emphasize the positive features in comparison to other similar
products
. In conclusion, advertising is an essential way to introduce a new
product
, but maybe it's better for businesses to mention some powerful points in comparison to other
products
.
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