Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
the
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modern society, some
people
believe that planting greens
outdoor
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in the urban area is more vital than constructing
house
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a house
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. In my opinion, I
am strongly agree
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with
this
notion and in the
further
paragraphs will be discussed details to support my agreement before a conclusion is reached It is certainly true that
trees
can help
people
to improve their
health
.
This
is because every plant can be reduced the pollution in the air by producing more oxygen.
For instance
,
people
who live in
the
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rural
areas
have more ages than
the
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those
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urban
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areas
because outside
areas
have more
trees
than
building
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buildings
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, but the
orther
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others
have more
building
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buildings
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than
greens
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green
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.
As a result
,
Trees
can be helped
people
both
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physical and mental
healths
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health
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by producing more oxygen in the air.
Nevertheless
, developing houses is important to contribute to the economy's growth, which means an increase
the
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building is an essential
impact
on developing countries. To
iullstrate
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illustrate
, the development city as NewYork City
have
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more
hight-rise
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high-rise
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building than
trees
.
Consequently
,
to develop
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more buildings
are
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only
impact
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on economy's growth, but
no
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straight
impact
on individuals. In conclusion,
although
developing houses in urban
areas
is important for economic
impact
, planting more
trees
is much more essential to help
people
both physical and mental
health
as
desence
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defence
health
is the most vital thing in
people
's life.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that
people
should be planting more greens to produce more oxygen to reduce or recover their
health
issues in
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city life.
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