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Internet is an important part of our lives and we cannot imagine our job or studies without it. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the Internet?

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With the increase in technological
advancement
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 more and more
people
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 are connected through
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internet
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. In recent times, learning and working cannot be considered without
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internet
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, as it become a
cruicial
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crucial
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acessibility
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accessibility
 and reduced cultural barriers. but
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 highlights two major
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 which includes, physical isolation and increased dependency on
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plateforms
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platforms
. One of
major
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benefit
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benefits
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 of
web
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the web
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 is that
people
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 are more
conected
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connected
 to each other through various social media
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plateforms
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platforms
.
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,
People
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 can connect with each other around the world in no time.
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, Instagram, Facebook and Whatsapp are one of the most used social applications. They had the option to work remotely from any part of the globe.
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, Companies like Google, Amazon and
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 provide a number of remote opportunities. The other advantage is that cultural differences between communities have been reduced. They not only had the option to work remotely but
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 had
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access to learning programs online from any part of the globe .
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, Companies like Google, Amazon and
netsol
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 provide a number of remote opportunities.
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 leads to reduced cultural differences as
people
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 start to network with
people
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 from different backgrounds. One of
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of
internet
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 increased usage is that individuals are started feeling isolated even in
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a public
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gathering
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gatherings
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. As anyone is engaged with his or her gadget.
People
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 tend to be active on social media but
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 isolated in real life.
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This leds
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 to increased anxiety and stress.
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,
hostellites
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hostelites
hostilities
 have more frequent
appoitment
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appointment
appointments
 with the psychologist compared to day scholars in most of the universities.
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 significant demerit of
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the worldwide-web
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worldwide-web
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worldwide web
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 is that increased our dependency on social media
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plateforms
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platforms
. We often tend to do menial tasks using
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internet
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 recently compared to the past .
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, it increases the risk associated with
internet
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 service
provider
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providers
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 in terms of security and availability.
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,
people
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 are relying on online ERP (Enterprise Resource Planning) to manage their data.
However
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, there is little probability of
recorvery
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recovery
 of data if that erp broke down. In conclusion, our dependency on
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internet
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 space has
been
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increased significantly, it seems impossible to learn or work without suitable
internet
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 access.
This
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 development has many pros which
invloves
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involves
 better
reachabilty
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reachability
 and mitigating differences associated with culture.
However
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, there are some cons which
is
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 reduced physical interaction and increased reliance on some web
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plateforms
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platforms
.
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