The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
The pie charts and the line graph show information about,
proportion
of food budget spent on Correct article usage
the proportion
restaurant
meals
versus home cooking, and also
, how many meals
eaten
in Add a missing verb
are eaten
fast-food
restaurants
versus sit-down restaurants
in (1980,1990,2000 and 2010).
Overall
, The pie charts shows
the lowest budget spent on Change the verb form
show
restaurant
meals
before increased to half in 2010. While
the line graph shows, the charp
increasing in the number of Correct your spelling
sharp
meals
eaten in the fast-food
restaurants
.
The pie charts illustrate, the lowest changed
in Change the form of the verb
change
percentage
of food budget spent on Add an article
the percentage
restaurant
meals
. In 1980, the percentage was 10%, after 10 tears, become 15%, in 2000, shows Correct article usage
a slightly
slightly
Change the word
slight
increase
to 35%. In 2010, spent on restaurants
Change the noun form
restaurant
meals
has the same percentage of
home cooking 50%.
Change preposition
as
On the other hand
, the
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apply
fast-food
meals
and sit-down restaurants
, starting
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started
in
the same level with 20 Change preposition
at
meals
/per year
in 1980. After that, sit-down restaurant
meals
, increased to almost 35 meals
/per yearin
1990, Correct your spelling
year in
year
while
fast-food
has gradually Correct your spelling
fast food
increase
Change the verb form
increased
near
by 29 Change preposition
to
meals
/per year
at
the same period. Change preposition
in
After
1990 to 2000. there Change preposition
From
were
a sharp Change the verb form
was
increase
of
Change preposition
in
fast-food
meals
from 29 to 55 meals
/per year
, while
sit-down restaurants
has
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apply
increase
Replace the word
increased
withe
45 Correct your spelling
with
meals
/per year
. After 10 years,Correct your spelling
fast food
fast-food
reach almost 85 meals
/per year
, comparing
with sit-down Wrong verb form
compared
restaurants
Change the noun form
restaurant
meals
, that
has slightly Correct pronoun usage
which
increase
to 50 Wrong verb form
increased
meals
/per year
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, meals, fast-food, restaurants, increase, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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