The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
The pie charts and the line graph show information about,
proportion
of food budget spent on Correct article usage
the proportion
restaurant
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meals
versus home cooking, and Use synonyms
also
, how many Linking Words
meals
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eaten
in Add a missing verb
are eaten
fast-food
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restaurants
versus sit-down Use synonyms
restaurants
in (1980,1990,2000 and 2010).
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Overall
, The pie charts Linking Words
shows
the lowest budget spent on Change the verb form
show
restaurant
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meals
before increased to half in 2010. Use synonyms
While
the line graph shows, the Linking Words
charp
increasing in the number of Correct your spelling
sharp
meals
eaten in the Use synonyms
fast-food
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restaurants
.
The pie charts illustrate, the lowest Use synonyms
changed
in Change the form of the verb
change
percentage
of food budget spent on Add an article
the percentage
restaurant
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meals
. In 1980, the percentage was 10%, after 10 tears, become 15%, in 2000, shows Use synonyms
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a slightly
slightly
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slight
increase
to 35%. In 2010, spent on Use synonyms
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restaurants
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restaurant
meals
has the same percentage Use synonyms
of
home cooking 50%.
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as
On the other hand
, Linking Words
the
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apply
fast-food
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meals
and sit-down Use synonyms
restaurants
, Use synonyms
starting
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started
in
the same level with 20 Change preposition
at
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
in 1980. After that, sit-down Use synonyms
restaurant
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meals
, increased to almost 35 Use synonyms
meals
/per Use synonyms
yearin
1990, Correct your spelling
year in
year
while
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fast-food
has gradually Correct your spelling
fast food
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increase
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increased
near
by 29 Change preposition
to
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
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at
the same period. Change preposition
in
After
1990 to 2000. there Change preposition
From
were
a sharp Change the verb form
was
increase
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of
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in
fast-food
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meals
from 29 to 55 Use synonyms
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
, Use synonyms
while
sit-down Linking Words
restaurants
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has
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apply
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increase
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increased
withe
45 Correct your spelling
with
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
. After 10 years,Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
fast food
fast-food
reach almost 85 Use synonyms
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
, Use synonyms
comparing
with sit-down Wrong verb form
compared
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restaurants
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restaurant
meals
, Use synonyms
that
has slightly Correct pronoun usage
which
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increase
to 50 Wrong verb form
increased
meals
/per Use synonyms
year
.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurant, meals, fast-food, restaurants, increase, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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