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The world is changing rapidly, working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the causes for the changes and give suggestions how people should prepare for work in the future.

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The world is altering quickly , working conditions in
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 time are not the same as before and individuals
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 longer
dependence
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 on taking one
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 of their life. The main cause for
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changing
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 is
availability
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the availability
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 of
technology
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, and
job
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makerts
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markets
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 become more competitive,
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, I would like to recommend some measures for
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 to deal with
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changing
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active
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 lifestyle, and
learn
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a new skills
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. On the one hand, the primary reason why working conditions changing is
availability
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 of
technology
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. To illustrate, today employer can contact
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their employees via modern
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 namely, smartphones, and
comptuers
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computers
, which mean employees will take
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job
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 responsibilities .
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, more responsibilities mean more working hours, which make employees under stress.
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Job
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 market has become more competitive is another reason for
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changing
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. To put
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 other words, the number of companies worldwide has increased dramatically, which
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job
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makert
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market
 competitive.
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,
this
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 trend
motivate
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people
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 to change their jobs in
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 to find
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apply
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better working condition
such
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 as
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 flexible working hours, high salaries, and development opportunities.
On the other hand
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, I would like to suggest some solutions for
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 to cope with
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 development. The first effective measure,
people
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 could adopt
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 lifestyle in
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 to deal
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 harsh working conditions.
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people
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 can
engaging
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 in sports activities like, swimming, gym, and running in
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mtigate
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mitigate
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of
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 too
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working hours. The second efficient solution
people
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 should learn a new skill in
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 to improve their CV.
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,
people
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 can improve their skills
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 as
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 communication, solving -
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, and teamwork, which
these skill
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 can make
people
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are
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more likely to get
a better
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better job opportunities
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job
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 opportunities.
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, The major cause for
this
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changing
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 is
availability
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the availability
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 of
technology
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, and
job
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makerts
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markets
market
 has become more competitive,
however
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, I suggested some steps for
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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to cope with
this
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changing
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change
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 including,
adopt
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adopting
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active
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an active
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 lifestyle, and
learn
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learning
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useful skills.
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