The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The two pictures compare the layout of a

school

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as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.

It is clear that

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the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new

school

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building. The

school

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will

then

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be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students. In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the

school

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, and the two

school

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buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils and a third building will have been constructed.

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, the plan is to join the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path that links the buildings only. As the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sports field will need to be laid. A new road will

also

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be built from the main entrance to the second car park.

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, no changes will be made to the main entrance and the original car park.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

184 words

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