The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.
The two pictures compare the layout of a
school
as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.
It is clear that
the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new school
building. The school
will then
be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students.
In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the school
, and the two school
buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils and a third building will have been constructed. Furthermore
, the plan is to join the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path that links the buildings only.
As the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sports field will need to be laid. A new road will also
be built from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally
, no changes will be made to the main entrance and the original car park.Submitted by maokaiyi0423 on
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