The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The two pictures compare the layout of a

school

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as it was in the year 2004 with a proposed site design for the year 2024.

It is clear that

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the main change for 2024 involves the addition of a new

school

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building. The

school

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will

then

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be able to accommodate a considerably larger number of students. In 2004, there were 600 pupils attending the

school

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, and the two

school

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buildings were separated by a path running from the main entrance to the sports field. By 2024, it is expected that there will be 1000 pupils and a third building will have been constructed.

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, the plan is to join the two original buildings together, creating a shorter path that links the buildings only. As the third building and a second car park will be built on the site of the original sports field, a new, smaller sports field will need to be laid. A new road will

also

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be built from the main entrance to the second car park.

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, no changes will be made to the main entrance and the original car park.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

184 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can a lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Car owership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are n ow "one big traffic jam'

Do you think that ageing society will disapear? what are the advantages and disadvantages of having more old people in society?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.