The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sprots between 2008 and 2014 and the second one shows the number of children who paticipated in three sports in Britain over the same period.
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The two line charts give information about the average expenditure on British children’s sports on a monthly basis and the number of children participating in three different physical games, from 2008 to 2014.
Overall
, the money spent on sports by young people in the UK witnessed a steady increase over the period shown, and
this
gave rise to the increasing number of participants in three sports games, in which football was the most welcomed by them. When it comes to the expenditure averaged by month for children’s physical activities, it grew by more than £10 during the 6-year period, rising from £20 to around 32 each month in 2014. With regard to the quantities of playing different games for the young, approximately 8
million
of them played soccer in 2008, which outstripped the number of the others combined, and
then
it surged to around 9
million
6 years later, with some fluctuations.
By contrast
, the figure for athletics was almost negligible at
first,
which approached nearly 5
million
in six years, exceeding that of swimming which grew to 4.5
million
in 2014.
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