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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008 (%). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph compares the 3 major issues that residents in 7
cities
Use synonyms
 of the UK dealt with in 2008.
Overall
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, people in all the
cities
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 were concerned most about health services and
education
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 and training
although
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 the former was more serious in some
cities
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while
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 the residents were troubled by the latter in other
cities
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.
Air
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 pollution remained the least significant problem in every city.
According to
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 the figures, health services and
education
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 and training are by far the biggest issues in the
cities
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 in the UK as there is an incredible gap between the two and
air
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 pollution.
For instance
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, Belfast and Cardiff are the
cities
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 with the highest rates of concerns about health services with 59% and 57%respectively.
In other words
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, they are slightly more serious troubles in New
Castle
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, Birmingham and Manchester than
education
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 and training.
In addition
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, there is no significant difference in the graphs for
education
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 and training, all exceeding 50% except for New
Castle
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 and Manchester with both approximately 45%. In spite of the severity of the two problems,
air
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 pollution is a minor trouble in all 7
cities
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 by different degrees.
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, all the figures stood just below 20% and contamination of
air
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 was the least urgent issue in New
Castle
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 with only 5%.
In contrast
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, the place that it hit most seriously was Manchester which shared 15% and was almost three times as much as New
Castle
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, education, air, castle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant issue
  • high percentage
  • real estate market
  • traffic congestion
  • transportation issues
  • urban areas
  • health services
  • dissatisfaction
  • healthcare facilities
  • crime rates
  • safety
  • law enforcement
  • education and employment issues
  • job market
  • educational systems
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