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In modern times, many authorities make the decision to develop mass transit rather than individual

transport

systems because of its cheapness and more eco-friendly approach.

However

such

action has

also

a significant drawback that

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with

government

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the government

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budget. From my point of view, the pros outweigh the cons and in

this

essay

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I am going to explain why I think so.

Firstly

, it is more economical to improve social

transport

than to try substituting it with effective systems of roads.

For example

, trains have more space for transportation of international or internal goods; they are more suitable for long-term use. Since the nineteenth century,

this

type of

transport

has shown

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efficiency. It was used during different world wars and was an important and groundbreaking invention for the world economy and for international trade.

In addition

, it could deliver all that was required through the places where usual

transport

could not.

Secondly

, bus lines produce less pollution than roadways. If all car drivers decided to change their automobiles to buses, the total carbon footprint would dramatically decrease because one bus generates less carbon dioxide emissions than thirty or twenty cars in combination. Apart from buses that use gasoline as fuel, a new electronic version will be spreading and replacing the usual one.

Nevertheless

, reducing investments in building new roads can cause a serious problem for the government. By cutting the number of new roads, it is

also

destroying the car market, which is a significant source of income for the budget.

Consequently

, there is no finance for maintaining public

transport

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social payments and so forth. Taking everything into account, government funding of public

transport

has more benefits because of

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its

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affordability and eco-friendliness.

Although

such

a decision can bring about

budget

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a budget

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deficit and following shortage of money for other projects.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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