Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

Certain groups of people assert that restaurants have the obligation to publish the nutritional
information
of each meal they provide.
While
this
information
can aid
costomers
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customers
in their
diet
control, I still think that it will
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negative effects. Nutritional
information
is
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essential data for individuals who are on a
diet
to calculate their calories, it will be considerably helpful if restaurants supply
this
information
. For individuals, providing
such
information
on each dish saves them
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amount of time.
For example
, people who are on a calorie-controlled
diet
need to record each meal’s ingredient, in order to analyze how much exercise they have to complete
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or when to take the next meal. Surprisingly,
this
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a lot of time and people occasionally give up on math first rather than
diet
control.
Consequently
, with
this
policy, restaurants not only provide
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nutritional
information
but
also
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convenience.
However
, providing nutritional
information
for each meal can cause
costomers
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customers
to be too concerned about their own health and less about the food they like.
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is the
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importance in ordering, the priority
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to be the meal in the restaurant. Showing nutritional
information
on the menu provokes them
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certain meals, which is not a good phenomenon. Taiwanese take
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, previously, there is a short period of time
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they over-concentrated on ingredients
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caused depression illness. Despite health
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important for human beings, these extended problems led to a
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negative
impact. In conclusion, offering nutritional
information
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with severe effects, so I believe that in
this
situation the disadvantage
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the advantage.
This
adjustment is not necessary.
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