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The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050. Units are given in percentages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050. Units are given in percentages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the proportion of
adults
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 of working
age
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 in four countries, France, the United States,
Japan
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 and
Germany
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, over a
90 year
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90-year
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 period. Taken as a whole, the
working
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working-age
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age
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 population of all four countries peaked between 1990 and 2000, before showing a projected decline to 2050. Though
Japan
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 and
Germany
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 had the highest numbers of working-
age
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adults
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 in the 1990s, both are forecast to have the lowest by 2050,
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 the United States and France will have the highest. With regard to
Japan
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 and
Germany
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, both had
working
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age
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 populations at over 65% in 1960.
Whereas
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Germany’s
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Germany
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initially
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 dips slightly, their proportions of working
adults
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 peaked in unison at seventy
percent
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per cent
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 by 1990, before showing a projected decline to 52% for
Japan
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 and 55% for
Germany
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 by 2050.
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, the percentage of
adults
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 under the
age
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 of retirement in the United States and France showed a gradual increase from around 60% for both in 1960 to reaching a peak of over 65% by 1980. Over the next 30 years, each displayed slight fluctuations before being predicted to decline steadily to 60% and 55% respectively by the period's end.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, age, japan, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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