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Traffic congestion is a major problem in most large cities ,nowadays. What are the causes of traffic congestion in cities? what could the government do to reduce this problem

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The traffic problem has become a major problem in today's world, especially in big cities. What measures can be taken by the government and people for
this
, I will explain to you below.
to begin
 with, let 's talk about the main problems. people usually go to their workplaces in their own cars, which causes transport jams. For
this
, the government can lower the ticket prices of public transport vehicles and make these vehicles more comfortable.
On the other hand
, traffic vehicles cause air pollution and threaten human health. We can use media groups
such
 as radio and television to make people aware of
this
 issue.
As a result
,
the
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traffic trouble threatens our present and future and we can reduce the effects of
this
 problem with the measures that can be taken.
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