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The line graph shows the percentage of Internet users in Canada, Mexico and the USA from 1999 to 2009.

The line graph shows the percentage of Internet users in Canada, Mexico and the USA from 1999 to 2009.
#line #percentage #internet #users #canada #mexico #usa
The line graph shows the
number
 of foreign
travelers
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travellers
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 who came to England for
the
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apply
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three different goals from 1989 to 2009. Generally, the
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number of travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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came
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who came
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 to the UK for
holliday
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holiday
holidays
, business and visiting
to
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apply
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friends
 or
realtives
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relatives
 constantly rose from 1989 to 2009. More specifically, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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came
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who came
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 to England for
holliday
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holiday
 rocketed to nearly 10
million
 from 1989 to 1999. After five years, the
number
 of
visistors
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visitors
 decreased
dramaticlly
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dramatically
 by over 2
million
. In 2009, a significant
rose
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rise
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 of 9
million
 was witnessed in the
number
 of
traveler
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travelers
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.
On the other hand
,
visit
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visits
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 to
friends
 or relatives was a huge drop of 4
million
 in the
number
 of visitors in 1993. From 1993 to 2004, the
number
 of visitors
came
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who came
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 to the UK for business and visit to
friends
 or relatives rose slightly to over 6
million
 but visit to
friends
 or relatives keep increased to 8
million
 in 2008 and after one year the trend reduced to 7
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitor. Meanwhile, the
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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came
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who came
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 for business saw a significant
declined
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decline
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 of over 6
million
 in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, friends, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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