The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian
men
and women doing regular physical activity in six
age
categories in the year 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the rank first of doing regular exercise allocates to
females
in all
age
groups,
while
in
ages
15 to 24, males stand first.
Moreover
, the proportion of males and
females
doing exercise regularly is almost the same in
ages
65 and above. In the
ages
15 to 24, the figure for
men
who exercise regularly was 52.8% and stood at first rank,
while
that for
females
had little difference by a narrow margin of 5%.
In addition
, with increasing
age
, the percentage of
men
who are doing physical activity regularly decreased to 39.5%,
however
after the
age
of 44, it increased slightly. There was the biggest disparity in the figure for males and
females
in
ages
35 to 44 with 12% and in
this
group, the figure for women was more than
men
.
Furthermore
, the highest share among
age
groups consisted of
females
who are 45 to 54 years old with 53.3%. Needless to say, the share of
men
and female doing physical activity constituted approximately the same with about 47%.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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