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Some people believe that a good teamwork makes companies successful. Others say that it is more important for companies to have good leaders. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that great
teamwork
 do companies prosperous, and they invest a large of
efforts
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 for
successes
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success
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,
while
 others say that it is significant to have competent heads for enterprises who coordinate
teamwork
. It is difficult to overestimate the
role
 of
teamwork
for
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in
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success
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the success
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 of a
company
,as far as
i
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I
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 am concerned
i
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I
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 believe that leaders perform key functions for achieving the goals of
corporation
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the corporation
a corporation
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. on the one hand,
teamwork
 is the main part of
system
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a system
the system
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 of the organization which
maintain
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maintains
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 vital processes in the
company
. Employees accomplish different functions that
aimed
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are aimed
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 at achieving
company's
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the company's
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 goals. A good example of
this
 is the waiter in
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 because the reputation of the institution depends on the work of which.
On the other hand
, without a literate leader who
coordinate
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 their actions and
control
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controls
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 their activities, the
company
 cannot compete effectively in the market. Leader the head of
team
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the team
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 in the workplace, with no head
team
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 may not be united and friendly.
For instance
, misunderstandings and conflicts may arise in the group and in
this
case
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 the
role
 of
leader
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the leader
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 which will resolve
this
 situation is very essential. After the work
team
 will continue to function effectively. In conclusion,
team work
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teamwork
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 plays an important
role
 in
functioning
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the functioning
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 of
company
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the company
a company
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, at the same time leaders play
crucial
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a crucial
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role
 in achieving the goals of
company
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the company
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.
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