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The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.
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The Bar graph below shows the expenditure in
Million
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Pounds
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 on fast food items by
income
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 groups in the UK including
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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, fish and
chips
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, pizza
Overall
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,
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 the famous for
people
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 with high
income
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 and average
income
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.
Whrease
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Whereas
chips
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 were
people
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 with low
income
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 bought the most In terms of two food,
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apply
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the most expensed
hamburger
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people
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 with high
income
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 spend
lot
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a lot
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 of money on
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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with
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apply
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45
million
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pounds
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.
Next,
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people
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 with high
income
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 spend about 35
million
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pounds
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 on
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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. In
constract
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contrast
,
people
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 with low
income
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 spend about 15
million
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pounds
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 on
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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. With regard to fish and
chips
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people
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 with average
income
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 spend 25
million
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pounds
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 on fish and
chips
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. Meanwhile,
people
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 with high
income
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 and low
income
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 spend about 15
million
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pounds
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 About pizza
people
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 with high
income
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 spend about 20
million
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pounds
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.
People
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 with average
income
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 spend half of
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people
pepole
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people
 with high
income
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while
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people
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low
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with low
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income
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 spend ⅓ of
people
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 with
average
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an average
the average
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income
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds, income, hamburger, chips, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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