The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.

The Bar graph below shows the Expenditure in Million Pounds on fast food items by income groups in the UK in 1990.
The Bar graph below shows the expenditure in
Million
Pounds
on fast food items by
income
groups in the UK including
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, fish and
chips
, pizza
Overall
,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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the famous for
people
with high
income
and average
income
.
Whrease
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Whereas
chips
were
people
with low
income
bought the most In terms of two food,
were
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the most expensed
hamburger
people
with high
income
spend
lot
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of money on
hamburger
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hamburgers
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with
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45
million
pounds
.
Next,
people
with high
income
spend about 35
million
pounds
on
hamburger
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hamburgers
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. In
constract
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contrast
,
people
with low
income
spend about 15
million
pounds
on
hamburger
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. With regard to fish and
chips
people
with average
income
spend 25
million
pounds
on fish and
chips
. Meanwhile,
people
with high
income
and low
income
spend about 15
million
pounds
About pizza
people
with high
income
spend about 20
million
pounds
.
People
with average
income
spend half of
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people
pepole
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people
with high
income
while
people
low
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with low
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income
spend ⅓ of
people
with
average
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an average
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income
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