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Write 250 word essay about the advantages and disadvantages of video games

I believe there are a
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 of advantages and disadvantages of
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games
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 in the beginning let's discuss the benefits of
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games
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. On one
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, you can increase your social skills by meeting a
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 of friends through
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games
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, part of the
video
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 there are online
video
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games
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 that you can talk and text a
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 of people at the same time
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, Fortnite in Fortnite you have to communicate with your teammates to win the game.
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 it increases your memorization by playing puzzle
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 and
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 that let your brain works hard,
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, memory cards there are a
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 of cards that show on your screen and you have to remember the cards places.
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, wasting your time is the most con of
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games
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 of playing you can go learn something for yourself,
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, learning languages can help you communicate with most people.
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 health issues
video
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games
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 can cause a
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 of health issues like being overweight,
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, most gamers don't go outside for doing sports they spend all day on the monitors. All in all
video
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games
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 have many advantages and disadvantages, on one
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hand
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 increase your social skills and increase your memorization,
on the other
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hand
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 wasting your time and cause health issues.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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