Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people while others believe tgat the purpose of museum is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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modern era technology is increasing and people are showing so much interest in
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modern technology, and in
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essay, I will discuss the effect of it on
surroundings
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and own mankind who lost their jobs to commence with the
environment
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affect
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of online shopping. We can save over time and there is no need for a physical establishment
Due to
which
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we can save Overland for the purposes
what
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is Apple my friend Siyda Ridda
all
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done Fizan and he said he's learnt
or
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agriculture and
get
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extra profit with a lad. Another benefit is that we can't
wait
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traffic
jam
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in cities and we can all relax at home with the help of online shopping for them or
talking
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about
the
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jobs
or
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people using online shopping Can not like Voice, they cannot afford their employee
salary
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therefore
in many companies jobs hiring rate decreased and unemployment take rice.
Moreover
, if we completely depend on it so
then
those people who do not possess the knowledge about online shopping cannot order
of
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bread and butter. In
conclusion
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I think online shopping
for
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white axolotl facilities, but we cannot adopt
in
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computers.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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