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The bar chart gives the information about the female unemployment rates in the countries of the United Kingdom between 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart gives the information about the female unemployment rates in the countries of the United Kingdom between 2013 and 2014.
The bar chart
dive
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the
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information about the female unemployment rates in the countries of the United Kingdom between 2013 and 2014. We can see that in 2013 the unemployment among women in England was highest and the lowest was
Wales
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in Wales
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 almost 5,4%.But after one year each
contries
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countries
 expect
the
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that
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 Scotland had been able to reduce the rate. In 2014 the situation changed for all of the countries. In terms of
femle
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females
 from
England
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,England
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 the
unemloyment
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unemployment
 rate had a slight decline by 0,3% and a total of
such
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constituded
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constituted
 to 6,5%.
Same
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The same
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 could be seen in Wales and
Northen
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Northern
 Ireland where the rates plunged by 0,4% for Wales and by 1% for Ireland respectively.
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, Scotland was only the one country
which
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whose
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 rates increased
to
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from
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 the previous year.
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, the England women were the most unemployed ones in 2013 and
Scotish
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Scottish
 women were the
must
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most
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 unemployed
ones
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apply
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in 2014 in
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accordance with
ohe
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the
 chart.

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