In some countries children take up paid jobs during the summer vacation. Some people feel that this amounts to child labour. Others argue that summer jobs help children learn valuable lessons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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summer
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summer
holidays it is quite common for the Use synonyms
children
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practical experience to the younger generation.
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In addition
to that, they believe young minds usually have little knowledge about both law and Linking Words
environment
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children
learn a lot during Use synonyms
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children
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contrary
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