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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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The pie charts and the line graph show information about the proportion of
food
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 budget spent on
restaurant
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meals
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 versus home cooking, and how many
meals
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 are eaten in
fast-
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food
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restaurants
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 versus sit-down
restaurants
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 (1980,1990,2000, and 2010). The pie charts show the lowest budget spent on
restaurant
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meals
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 before it increased to half in 2010. The line graph shows a sharp increase in the number of
meals
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 eaten in
fast-
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food
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restaurants
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. The pie charts illustrate the lowest change in the percentage of the
food
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 budget spent on
restaurant
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meals
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. In 1980, the rate was 10%. After ten tears, it became 15%, in 2000, shows a slight increase to 35%. In 2010, spent on
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meals
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 had the same percentage of home cooking, 50%.
On the other hand
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fast-
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food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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 started at the same level with 20
meals
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/per
year
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 in 1980. After that, sit-down
restaurant
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meals
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 increased to almost 35
meals
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/per
year
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 in 1990,
while
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 fast
food
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 gradually increased to 29
meals
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/per
year
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 in the same period. From 1990 to 2000. there was a sharp increase in
fast-
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food
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meals
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 from 29 to 55
meals
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/per
year
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,
while
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 sit-down
restaurants
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 increased to 45
meals
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/per
year
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. After ten years, fast
food
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 reached almost 85
meals
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/per
year
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, compared with sit-down
restaurant
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meals
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, which has slightly increased to 50
meals
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/per
year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurant, meals, fast-food, restaurants, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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