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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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These two given
pie
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 charts illustrate the marriage status of
the
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apply
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Canadian and Australian citizens.
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, married individuals and separated but not divorce
people
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 occupied the first and second rank respectively in
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the Australia
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Australia
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Australian
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pie
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chart
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,
conversely
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, these two groups are seen in reverse order in Canada's
chart
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.
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 Canada's
pie
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chart
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, citizens who preferred not to divorce and just live separately occupied the biggest fraction at 53% in
this
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chart
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 and married
people
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 are the second majority population among
Canadian
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Canadians
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. the fractions that belong to widowed and
never married
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never-married
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people
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 are identical at 7%.
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, the
people
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 who had a
same sex
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same-sex
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 marriage or divorced have the lowest rank in
this
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chart
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 respectively. Moving into Australia's population
pie
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chart
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,
while
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 the dwellers who got married and separated without divorce are two sizeable
majority
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 in
this
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 society at 46% and 41% respectively, the three other groups of Australian citizens, namely widowed, single and divorced are the three tiny minorities in
this
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 country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, people, chart with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marital status
  • population
  • pie charts
  • percentage
  • categories
  • Married
  • Single
  • Divorced
  • Widowed
  • distribution
  • noticeable trends
  • comparison
  • significantly different
  • similarities
  • striking differences
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