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The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The line graph differs the amount of nitrogen oxide by four types of vehicles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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It is noticeable that the number of
buses
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 produces the highest amount of nitrogen oxide
while
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 diesel cars are the most environmentally friendly.
In
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addition
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,addition
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 lorries and petrol
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car
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cars
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 experienced a slight decline during
this
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 period. As can be seen that
buses
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 emit 40
g
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/
km
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 at 10
km
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/h, with continuous increase
of
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 velocity the bus produces less nitrous oxide, reaching the most efficient 25
g
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/
km
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 when they run at 70 kph. Trucks are similar to
buses
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, half off emissions
to
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of
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 17
g
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/
km
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 at speeds of up to 90
km
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/h.
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, the efficiency
reduce
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 as the vehicles continue to drive at higher speeds, 42
g
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/
km
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 for
buses
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 and 25
g
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/
km
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 for lorries respectively. Whether the
car
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 runs on petrol or diesel, the waste emissions are relatively low. Emissions are not significantly reduced at any velocity, the basic petrol
car
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 remains at 10
g
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/
km
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while
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 the diesel
car
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 stabilizes at 5
g
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/
km
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 at all speeds.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words buses, car, g, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • nitrogen oxide
  • vehicle types
  • observed period
  • significant increase/decrease
  • emission levels
  • intersections
  • overtakes
  • largest/smallest emitter
  • conclude
  • overall trend
  • emission rankings
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