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The table reflects the amount of data of tourists who visited Vietnam from different 8 countries
Overall
, Australia is the highest forgiven
visitors
 spending,
while
 Cambodia is the second lowest one and the spending of Japanese and
Koreans
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visitors
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half of the sending by the British one.
To begin
 with, after analysis of the table Australia recorded the highest amount of tourist expenditure by 1893. And
However
, the stayment days in China are double the stayment in USA 12.2 and 6.1, respectively the spending in the USA is relatively twice
of
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the spending in China
it
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hits
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 1238 ,658.
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, Cambodia recorded the lowest expenditures among the 8countires
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 120$. Despite the fact that
visitors
 Japanese and Koreans almost double the statement of British 11.3, 10.9, 5.9they spend around half the British
visitors
 spend 984,854,1379.
Finally
, we divorced that the average sending is done by Russian
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visitors
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 of 798.
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