In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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Nowadays, improving the
transportation
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services of cities, railways, and public
transportation
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has a special role in
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sphere. In some selected countries, some
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believe that spending a large amount of money on building
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lines with the aim of having very fast trains between cities is essential.
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, others think that it should be spent on developing existing public
transportation
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. I think that it would be an essential step in
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plan if both projects could be developed constantly. By developing
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lines with the option of investment, it will take
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stage to that the cities will be flexibly connected to each other.
Railway
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transport is an important tool to make a reason which it will improve other
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services where there will be a variety of
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developed
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opportunities. After the investment in the
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industry, there will be another reason for the development of city
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: where
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the incide
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incide
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inside
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links in the city will be easier and more complex than before. Spending money with the aim of developing public transport, will help to make comfortable commuting for
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.
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,
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to use
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the
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public
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,
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the traffic jams that
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suffer from will be reduced.
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there will be another successful development in the field of the environment. Because of the intensive usage of public
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,
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, environmental protection will be friendly. In conclusion, if the government takes both options into account in order to develop
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transport delivery difficulties,
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constantly the issues that could damage
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's lives will
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from their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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