Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Through

time

, more and more diversity of

subjects

or jobs are

opened

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to newer generations and

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as the world gets more developed more jobs require a wide range of

subjects

. Today, I will write an essay discussing whether

students

should solely focus on

subjects

for their qualifications or whether

students

should try a wide variety of many other

subjects

. On the one hand,

in addition

to

students

who aren’t very sure or strong about their career

choices

, they may choose a course where they have to learn a required subject for their qualifications, and in today's

generation

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many

students

all around the world are clueless about their

future

.

This

where

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learning other side

subjects

are

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important, with

this

students

are able to gain more knowledge but have a true understanding of what they want for themselves. Despite learning more

subjects

,

students

can gain other friends in multiple fields

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they can ask for

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or advice about the subject they are curious about.

On the other hand

, there are multiple drawbacks

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learning multiple

subjects

. The first drawback is that

,

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by doing so

students

will have to spend more

time

and effort which causes

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on the mind and stress would build up. Another factor is that, it is a waste of

time

,

instead

of determining what they want in their youth years, they waste

time

and energy by doing so. The third and most drawback of

this

is that it takes a huge sum of money, not only will

students

struggle with their studies, they will have to worry financially as well. Some say that

this

is the most selfish thing a student can do to their parents, parents who sent us to universities hoping that we would graduate early and hopefully be successful in the

future

, but with

students

with their undetermined

choices

they cause their parents to suffer more than they should. To summarize my point,

students

should be more considerate of their

future

when they are younger, not when they are older and

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they should commit to their courses when they make their

choices

. I myself have made a choice and forever stick with my

choices

as I know very well what I want to do with my

future

.