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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram reflects details regarding the use of shared transport in a particular state,
according to
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 age,
as well as
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 location.
This
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 essay will focus on analyzing and comparing the use of public vehicles in 2016, based on various criteria.
Overall
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, the use of public vehicles,
such
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 as buses, is popular
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 large city residents, especially
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adults.
On the other hand
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, in other residents, the percentage number is significantly lower and decreases with time.
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, we can observe that in vast cities, the prominent age group is between 31 and 45. In fact, around 65% of people from
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 group opt for not having personal vehicles.
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, it has a major decline, starting from the age of 46.
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, in other
residents
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 we can see that the number of people using common transport is remarkably lower. Despite
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, the common transport is mostly used by young adults. Around 28% of people between 16 and 30, prefer public transportation.

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