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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The table gives information on how many
students
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 were studying in four different secondary
schools
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 in the
year
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 2000- 2009. It can be clearly seen that the voluntary-controlled
schools
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 recorded the highest numbers for student attendance in the first
year
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,
while
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 these numbers significantly decreased in the
last
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 two years.
In contrast
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, the
rate
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 of student attendance in community
schools
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 was lowest in the first
year
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 but it raised to the pic
at
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 the third
year
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.
According to
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 the table, the
rate
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 of
students
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 in the community
schools
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 was the least amount
to
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12% in the
year
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 2000,
while
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this
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rate
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 in the
last
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year
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 2009 significantly increased and reached the pic.
In contrast
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, the
rate
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 of pupils in the voluntary-controlled
schools
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 was more than half a percentage in the
year
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 2000
while
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last
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year
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 decreased significantly to 20% in the
year
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 2009.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of
students
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 in grammar
schools
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 decreased by half in the
year
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 2009 compared to the
year
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 2000. Basically,
students
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rate
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 in the specialist
schools
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 were not changed significantly in the given years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, last, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools, year, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 4 times.
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