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The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the consumption of meat in Spain between 2001 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart gives information about the
consumption
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 of six different
meats
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types of meat
slices of meat
lumps of meat
portions of meat
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 between 2001 and 2011. At the beginning of the period, beef was the most popular meat in 2001. The initial amount consumed was more than 700
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
However
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, between 2001 and 2007, the figure declined to less than 400
grams
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. Duck
consumption
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 was the only other figure that declined in a similar way during
this
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 time.
This
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 figure fell from 500
grams
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 to 300
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
On the other hand
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,
pork
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 and chicken
consumption
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 increased in a similar way between 2001 and 2007.
Pork
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consumption
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 increased from 450
grams
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 to 700 per
person
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 per
week
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.
This
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 trend did not continue after 2007. After 2007, chicken
consumption
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 increased to 900
grams
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, but
pork
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consumption
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 remained stable.
Lastly
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,
consumption
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 of goat and veal showed relatively stable trends over the period. The
consumption
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 of these meats was 100
grams
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 and 200
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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, respectively.
However
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, it is noteworthy that goat
consumption
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 briefly increased to approximately 280
grams
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 in 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 chicken and
pork
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 were the two
meats
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types of meat
slices of meat
lumps of meat
portions of meat
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 that showed the most notable increases in
consumption
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, and beef and duck
consumption
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 notably declined throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, grams, person, week, pork with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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