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Many people are working at home rather than work places. Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but other suggest it will cause stress in the home rather than work place. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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home
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people
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usually
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enterprises more considerable productivity and
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decreases
 things about work at
home
 it affects the mentality of a worker. There might be
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 why
people
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hold
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home
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 time management of
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females
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exceptions
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 to work and back. In US papular production at the house and their
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employees
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for
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 their necessities.
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Moreover
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 at the job gives you more
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concentration
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environment
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such
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concentrated
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nervous
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home
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 than
people
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home
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economic
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 goal.
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office
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rest
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caused
 right sense. In conclusion, I would argue that both sides have clear arguments,
however
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offices
office
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