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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or a shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is debated that accepting
unsatisfactory
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situation
 is a better choice than attempting to improve it.
While
 there may be some benefits to admitting awful circumstances, I believe that it is necessary and a better option to make some improvements. try to
change
 it. make
life
 happier, aiming for
better
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life
 is the meaning of
life
, Some people think that it is beneficial for them to just tolerate their current bad
situation
 for several reasons.
By choosing
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Choosing
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 not to make changes to
current
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the current
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situation
 allow them to have
a
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an
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 easier
life
.
For example
, they don't need to worry about what they need to do to make a
change
, to put extra
efforts
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effort
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working
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into working
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 on improving the
situation
.
In addition
, they may think it is risky to
change
 the bad phase that they are going through. They may try to use
a
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an
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 incorrect method to mess up the
situation
 even more.
On the other hand
, some optimistic people consider that attempting to
change
 the
situation
 is a better choice for these reasons.
Firstly
, by improving the
situation
,
such
 as unsatisfactory working conditions, they can live a
life
 with happiness as they are able to commit to the things they
truely
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truly
 enjoy doing.
Secondly
, they may believe that
aimming
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aiming
 for a better
life
 should be everyone's goal or meaning of
life
,
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 if humans don't try to
persue
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pursue
 a better
life
, there is no meaning
of
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in
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 living.
For instance
, there is a Chinese saying stating that if you don't try, you
are not exist
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. In conclusion, I would argue that it is better to try to make changes to a bad
situation
 rather than
admitting
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 it.
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