You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter give details of your study plans Explain why you want to get a part time job

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Dear John I am writing

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letter in regard to seeking your help in finding a part-time job in Kent.

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apply

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I am

joining

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taking

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a diploma course in cyber security from

kent university

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Kent University

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for six months. which will start in July 2023. It is a full-time time course on cybersecurity.the classes will be held daily from Monday to Saturday from 9.00am to 2.00 pm.

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, I planning to take a part-time job. it will fund my daily expenses and help me in

brushing

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improving

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my English language

skill

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skills

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. As you

are

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have been

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living in the UK for the

last

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three years you can guide me in searching part-time through your friend circle . The part-time job will give me an opportunity to know

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culture . It will definitely help me in understanding

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work practices in offices. my ideal part-time will be as a waiter, and computer operator. I look forward to hearing from you All the best Martin

yash334Fri Aug 11 2023

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for better coherence and cohesion.

coherence cohesion

Improve the logical structure of your letter by organizing your ideas more effectively.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriate, but consider adding more formal language and addressing the friend by their full name.

task achievement

Your response to the task is mostly complete, but consider adding more details about the specific type of part-time job you are looking for and how it relates to your career goals in cybersecurity.

grammatical range

Ensure a more consistent and accurate use of verb tenses and sentence structures for greater grammatical range.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

158 words

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