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The diagram explains the way in which breaks are made for the building industry

The diagram explains the way in which breaks are made for the building industry
The diagram explains the way in which breaks are made for the building industry. The manufacturing process
have
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has
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 the 7 stages, which begins with digging
a
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clay
a lump of clay
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clay
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 and culminating in delivery.
The first step is
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 the
clay
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 is dug up by
digger
Correct article usage
a digger
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.
This
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clay
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 is
then
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 placed onto a metal grid, which is used to break up the
clay
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 into small pieces assisting with
roller
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a roller
the roller
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.
Following
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this
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, the sand and water
is
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are
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 mixed with
clay
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 to make the brick itself, the process is made
wether
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whether
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 the mould or by wire cutter.
Next
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The next
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 step is that bricks
is
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are
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 dried
with
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in
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oven
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the oven
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 for 24 - 28 hours.
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Subsequently
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,Subsequently
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breacks
Correct your spelling
breaks
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 put into
moderate
Correct article usage
a moderate
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 kiln which varies
200
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from 200
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 - 980 degrees,
following
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followed
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to
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by
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high
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a high
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 kiln which
is have
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has
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 a way higher temperature
and
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apply
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the final process is
leave
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to leave
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in
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it in
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cooling
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a cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours,
to sum up
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 with
package
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the package
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then
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and then
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 deliver to their destinations.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clay with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "explains" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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