The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture lays off four diagrams describing energy generation by different types of fuel in

Australia

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and

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in 1980 and 2000.

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writing will summarize some important information and compare them when necessary.

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, the two nations produced more electricity and used less natural gas in 2000 than in 1980.

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in the year 1980,

Australia

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produced 100

units

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of the total energy

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France

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only generated 90

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. As time went on,

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surpassed

Australia

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's ability to make power, Napoleon's beloved country made 180

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worth of power, meanwhile,

Australia

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was only capable of generating 170

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in 2000.

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phenomenon was caused by the innovation of the latest nuclear power applied by the French.

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Australia

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utilizes more water potential energy,

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France

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uses less hydropower.

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, the country of koala

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depletes more coal than

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, in 2000, the utilization of oil as a source to turn on electric machinery can be decreased in

Australia

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in contrast

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France

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which was not able to do it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, units with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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