The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The picture lays off four diagrams describing energy generation by different types of fuel in

Australia

and

France

in 1980 and 2000.

This

writing will summarize some important information and compare them when necessary.

Overall

, the two nations produced more electricity and used less natural gas in 2000 than in 1980.

First,

in the year 1980,

Australia

produced 100

units

of the total energy

while

France

only generated 90

units

. As time went on,

France

surpassed

Australia

's ability to make power, Napoleon's beloved country made 180

units

worth of power, meanwhile,

Australia

was only capable of generating 170

units

in 2000.

This

phenomenon was caused by the innovation of the latest nuclear power applied by the French.

Moreover

Australia

utilizes more water potential energy,

in contrast

France

uses less hydropower.

On the other hand

, the country of koala

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depletes more coal than

France

In addition

, in 2000, the utilization of oil as a source to turn on electric machinery can be decreased in

Australia

in contrast

France

which was not able to do it.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, france, units with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

175 words

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