Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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request
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, namely their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some individuals say that this
information
may be relevant and beneficial. Others believe otherwise
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On the one hand, some think share
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information
with employers
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On the other hand
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To begin
with, some companies
ask applicants
about their interests in order to make sure applicants
have valuable skills. For instance
, some companies
prefer applicants
who have interests
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As a result
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Furthermore
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To sum up
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