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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian
females
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 and males doing regular physical activity in different
age
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 groups in the year 2010.
Overall
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, women stand first in all
age
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 groups, except the 15 to 24
age
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group
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 which
men
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 ranked first.
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, the highest percentage of
females
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 doing exercise regularly accounts for the 45 to 54
age
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group
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. In the 15 to 24
age
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group
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,
men
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 stood
first,
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and the figure for
men
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 was 52.8%,
while
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 that for women was lower by a narrow margin of 5%. By increasing
age
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 groups, the share of women who did regular physical activity increased slightly,
while
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 that of
men
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 decreased to 39.5% which was the minimum percentage in the 35 to 44
age
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group
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. The highest proportion of
females
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 who did exercise regularly accounted for the 45 to 54
age
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group
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 with 53.3%,
then
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 it declined to 47.1% in 65 and over,
whereas
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 the figure for males was almost the same as that for
females
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, age, group, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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