The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The bar chart compares the percentages of Australian
females
and males doing regular physical activity in different
age
groups in the year 2010.
Overall
, women stand first in all
age
groups, except the 15 to 24
age
group
which
men
ranked first.
Moreover
, the highest percentage of
females
doing exercise regularly accounts for the 45 to 54
age
group
. In the 15 to 24
age
group
,
men
stood
first,
and the figure for
men
was 52.8%,
while
that for women was lower by a narrow margin of 5%. By increasing
age
groups, the share of women who did regular physical activity increased slightly,
while
that of
men
decreased to 39.5% which was the minimum percentage in the 35 to 44
age
group
. The highest proportion of
females
who did exercise regularly accounted for the 45 to 54
age
group
with 53.3%,
then
it declined to 47.1% in 65 and over,
whereas
the figure for males was almost the same as that for
females
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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