The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people inly ate local produced food. what extend does the advantage outweigh disadvantage?
Some
people
believe there are many benefits in our environment and economy to consuming Use synonyms
local production
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locally produced
food
items Use synonyms
instead
of being transported from other states or imported from foreign countries. I think, only eating locally produced Linking Words
food
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has
more advantageous
The main advantage of the intake of local Verb problem
is
food
is that the economic level of village Use synonyms
people
will increase because these citizens depend more and more on agriculture and agriculture-related Use synonyms
food
production Use synonyms
such
as fruits, vegetables, milk and milk Linking Words
products
.So Use synonyms
people
can involved in Use synonyms
such
type of business and Linking Words
earned
more money. Wrong verb form
earn
Due to
that not only every individual but Linking Words
also
rural become developed. Linking Words
For example
, Sri Lanka is a developing country Linking Words
which
7% of GDP growth dependent on agricultural Correct your spelling
with
products
and exporting materials related to agricultural goods Use synonyms
such
as rubber, Tea, cocoa and pepper. Linking Words
Moreover
, the price of agricultural goods and related Linking Words
products
are comparatively lower than the transported Use synonyms
products
because Use synonyms
food
cost depends on manufacturing, storage and transport. If Use synonyms
people
stay on local foods no need for transport expenditure and Use synonyms
also
storage cost is reduced. Linking Words
And
Correct word choice
Also
also
more benefits are citizens can consume chemical-free fruits and vegetables. If goods want to Linking Words
store
for more days have to use preservatives Wrong verb form
be stored
consequently
leading to a number of health problems Linking Words
such
as allergies, cancer and indigestion.
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On the other hand
, only eating rural foods has some drawbacks. One of the disadvantages is that Linking Words
due to
the lack of knowledge, technology and weather Linking Words
condition
are not suitable for all varieties of Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
food
production. To illustrate Use synonyms
this
, strawberry farming needs a very cool climate and greenhouse conditions if the temperature slightly increases may lead to disaster on the farm. Linking Words
Hence
only available for limited fruits and vegetables lead to nutrient deficiency.
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To conclude
, I believe, the intake of local items is more beneficial because improves the lifestyle and health even though access to limited Linking Words
food
and related Use synonyms
products
.Use synonyms
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